Simply impressive !!!
I had attempted an abstract long before... now read this... courtesy aneesha ..... surely my work stands no where in front of her description ..... i liked it so much that included it here.
Read this and then see the abstract :
Water, Air and Fire I
The three mothers of Universe – Water, Air and Fire, considered as the origin of the entire cosmos strikingly resembles woman’s persona. I have attempted to compare their traits one by one. This post is dedicated to water, the creator of Earth.
WATER
Just like the little rivulet, flows down the hillock, bubbling gaily,
The cherubic little girl in her surpasses the impeding pebbles, effortlessly,
As this coy brook shapes into a waterfall, with the sole aim to advance,
The woman in her rises up to face the circumstances that resists her stance,
Triumphing over the trials, as this torrent transforms into a gigantic ocean,
Powerful yet modest, boundless yet in limits, mighty yet full of compassion,
The mother in her assumes such astonishing contrasts with ardent passion.
Life begins in womb as the fluid shields the fetus, blood induces the spirit,
And milk nurtures the baby, all forms of water, revitalizing the teeny bit,
The perfectionist in her creates the flawless combination of beauty and brain,
And she delivers her elite creation, beating the limits of unbearable strain,
The graceful curves, the soulful serenity or the refreshing vivacity,
It’s a delight to admire their traits and get mesmerized in their beauty.
I wonder what God had in his mind, when he created woman,
Strikingly analogous to the aqueous spirit!
Here is the next one...Air...the space between heaven and earth...which gave birth to spirit.
AIR
Like the occasional gust of air that brushes against your tender cheeks,
With your eyes shut, as you let your soul get pampered to its peak;
She walks along leaving you mesmerized by her grace and lore,
The bracing breeze or her fleeting look, you are left longing for more.
As the zephyr quivers both the green and ripe leaves, impartially,
She makes a million hearts flutter as she paces past elegantly;
On a typical day, when you least expect something extraordinary,
When the sun shines bright and everything looks merry;
The breeze changes its direction and blows right through your terrace,
She enters your life and you wonder why God is so generous!
Like the breathe enters the flute pores to create melodic symphony,
She pervades your soul to transform your aura in to a mellow harmony;
Just when you get addicted to their enjoyable presence and vitalizing touch,
The tender breeze takes the form of devastating cyclone, wrecking thy life,
No rhyme or reason, she walks away breaking the bond of man and wife;
And you are left wondering why the hell then the breeze blew your way,
Merely to make you realize that, with woman and wind around,
Unpredictability is not far away!
.........Wasnt that awesome !!!
this was what i had tried sometime before .... i just felt both of them kinda gel together.... white is what is common to water, air and fire !!
I had attempted an abstract long before... now read this... courtesy aneesha ..... surely my work stands no where in front of her description ..... i liked it so much that included it here.
Read this and then see the abstract :
Water, Air and Fire I
The three mothers of Universe – Water, Air and Fire, considered as the origin of the entire cosmos strikingly resembles woman’s persona. I have attempted to compare their traits one by one. This post is dedicated to water, the creator of Earth.
WATER
Just like the little rivulet, flows down the hillock, bubbling gaily,
The cherubic little girl in her surpasses the impeding pebbles, effortlessly,
As this coy brook shapes into a waterfall, with the sole aim to advance,
The woman in her rises up to face the circumstances that resists her stance,
Triumphing over the trials, as this torrent transforms into a gigantic ocean,
Powerful yet modest, boundless yet in limits, mighty yet full of compassion,
The mother in her assumes such astonishing contrasts with ardent passion.
Life begins in womb as the fluid shields the fetus, blood induces the spirit,
And milk nurtures the baby, all forms of water, revitalizing the teeny bit,
The perfectionist in her creates the flawless combination of beauty and brain,
And she delivers her elite creation, beating the limits of unbearable strain,
The graceful curves, the soulful serenity or the refreshing vivacity,
It’s a delight to admire their traits and get mesmerized in their beauty.
I wonder what God had in his mind, when he created woman,
Strikingly analogous to the aqueous spirit!
Here is the next one...Air...the space between heaven and earth...which gave birth to spirit.
AIR
Like the occasional gust of air that brushes against your tender cheeks,
With your eyes shut, as you let your soul get pampered to its peak;
She walks along leaving you mesmerized by her grace and lore,
The bracing breeze or her fleeting look, you are left longing for more.
As the zephyr quivers both the green and ripe leaves, impartially,
She makes a million hearts flutter as she paces past elegantly;
On a typical day, when you least expect something extraordinary,
When the sun shines bright and everything looks merry;
The breeze changes its direction and blows right through your terrace,
She enters your life and you wonder why God is so generous!
Like the breathe enters the flute pores to create melodic symphony,
She pervades your soul to transform your aura in to a mellow harmony;
Just when you get addicted to their enjoyable presence and vitalizing touch,
The tender breeze takes the form of devastating cyclone, wrecking thy life,
No rhyme or reason, she walks away breaking the bond of man and wife;
And you are left wondering why the hell then the breeze blew your way,
Merely to make you realize that, with woman and wind around,
Unpredictability is not far away!
.........Wasnt that awesome !!!
this was what i had tried sometime before .... i just felt both of them kinda gel together.... white is what is common to water, air and fire !!
9 Comments:
wow!!..The abstract adds a new dimension to the poem...complements perfectly.
Thanx for the mention :D
thank me man !! i am here commenting despite an ailing compu ;)
but then had to comment as the poem really was tad too awesome. Specially for someone like me who finds it awfully difficult to even make four lines rhyme :( great description and all .
aur pic ke baare mein to the less said the better. think have already commented bout it before :-?
@aneesha ... hey i referred ur link to many frnds ... twas appreciated by one and all .... and yeah thanks to you ... u gave me matter for a new post :P
@ arunabh - same here making things rhyme is not my cup of tea either :P .... yeah i had posted the pic before .... thanks :)
@sai: Thanx again ...Air on the way...mabbe in a week if time permits...nd seriously the poem looks better here...The abstract effect :D
@Arunabh: Thank you :)
@aneesha - i will add fire and air here too :D ... blatantly violating all copyrights .... if there are any :P
My pleasure!!! :)
@aneesha
awesome poem gurly !!
@sai
equally awesome work. Is this also adobe photoshop mastery ?
~prachi
@prachi - yeah it is ... and thanks ... keep visiting !!!
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